#feedback

The biggest problem with this essay is a lack of coherence support

you should be careful about The Logical line of argument in your essay

each sentence should develop the sentence before it

The other issue is inaccurate vocabulary and especially collocations

you should check each word and sentence in dictionary and Google and make sure it is correct

❌include✅provides
❌specify ✅dedicate/allocate budget
❌causes more facilities availability✅ results in accessibility of more facilities.
Etc❌✅and so on

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❌Can to do ✅can do
❌To each other person ✅to other people
❌at other hands✅on the other hand
❌I don't get married✅I am not married
❌I'm very young to get married✅I'm too young to get married
❌I'm a child myself✅I'm not mature enough yet

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#Feedback

Try to pay more attention to intonation, which is the way your voice rises and falls like natuve speakers.

Work on your pronunciation for less frequesntly used words.

Try to use wider range of grammatical structures as much as possible.

❌target place✅destination
❌relationship of countries✅relationships among countries
...
❌many of people ✅many people
❌Hard to them✅difficult for them

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❌womens✅women
❌make their own position ✅have a better place in society
❌make connections with different people ✅communicate with others
❌Womans✅women
❌Can being ✅can be
❌childrens✅children
❌put children in right way✅ take care of their children
❌feel boring and unvaluable ✅feel bored and worthless

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❌we can access to ✅we can access
✅will totally change ✅✅will dramatically altered
✅will be dominant in the future✅✅will become the mainstream in decades to come

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