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#feedback
Try to check the words you want to write in a dictionary and check especially the collocation and the combination of words together and pay a lot of attention to the context too.
❌❌❌Second support in first paragraph is wrong
❌❌❌Second support in second paragraph is not logical or coherent
❌dedicated higher salary for✅dedicate higher salary to
❌cause job opportunity✅ creates jobs
❌diversity field of works✅ there is more diversity in the field of work
❌collect their staffs✅ recruit their staff
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Try to check the words you want to write in a dictionary and check especially the collocation and the combination of words together and pay a lot of attention to the context too.
❌❌❌Second support in first paragraph is wrong
❌❌❌Second support in second paragraph is not logical or coherent
❌dedicated higher salary for✅dedicate higher salary to
❌cause job opportunity✅ creates jobs
❌diversity field of works✅ there is more diversity in the field of work
❌collect their staffs✅ recruit their staff
.
.
.
👆👆👆 نمونه رایتینگ یکی از بچه های کلاس آنلاین روزهای فرد که چند هفته پیش در آزمون رسمی آیلتس نمره ۶ رو بدست آوردند. به خطاها و فیدبک توجه بفرمایید.
پرسش این بوده:
🔴 Do you prefer to live in a big city or in a small town?
پرسش این بوده:
🔴 Do you prefer to live in a big city or in a small town?
اسپیکینگ آیلتس IELTS Speaking
Audio
🔴 Estimated Score for this Speaking sample is 6.5
اسپیکینگ آیلتس IELTS Speaking
Audio
🔴 Estimated Score for this Speaking sample is 6.5 to 7
Forwarded from ielts2 Support
#feedback
The biggest problem with this essay is a lack of coherence support
you should be careful about The Logical line of argument in your essay
each sentence should develop the sentence before it
The other issue is inaccurate vocabulary and especially collocations
you should check each word and sentence in dictionary and Google and make sure it is correct
❌include✅provides
❌specify ✅dedicate/allocate budget
❌causes more facilities availability✅ results in accessibility of more facilities.
Etc❌✅and so on
The biggest problem with this essay is a lack of coherence support
you should be careful about The Logical line of argument in your essay
each sentence should develop the sentence before it
The other issue is inaccurate vocabulary and especially collocations
you should check each word and sentence in dictionary and Google and make sure it is correct
❌include✅provides
❌specify ✅dedicate/allocate budget
❌causes more facilities availability✅ results in accessibility of more facilities.
Etc❌✅and so on
❤️بهشت فیدبک ها!
بانک فیدبک های رایتینگ و اسپیکینگ کلاس های فشرده آیلتس مهندس ابوالقاسمی 👇👇👇
@FeedbackParadise
بانک فیدبک های رایتینگ و اسپیکینگ کلاس های فشرده آیلتس مهندس ابوالقاسمی 👇👇👇
@FeedbackParadise
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#feedback
❌Can to do ✅can do
❌To each other person ✅to other people
❌at other hands✅on the other hand
❌I don't get married✅I am not married
❌I'm very young to get married✅I'm too young to get married
❌I'm a child myself✅I'm not mature enough yet
❌Can to do ✅can do
❌To each other person ✅to other people
❌at other hands✅on the other hand
❌I don't get married✅I am not married
❌I'm very young to get married✅I'm too young to get married
❌I'm a child myself✅I'm not mature enough yet
Forwarded from ielts2 Support
#Feedback
Try to pay more attention to intonation, which is the way your voice rises and falls like natuve speakers.
Work on your pronunciation for less frequesntly used words.
Try to use wider range of grammatical structures as much as possible.
❌target place✅destination
❌relationship of countries✅relationships among countries
...
❌many of people ✅many people
❌Hard to them✅difficult for them
Try to pay more attention to intonation, which is the way your voice rises and falls like natuve speakers.
Work on your pronunciation for less frequesntly used words.
Try to use wider range of grammatical structures as much as possible.
❌target place✅destination
❌relationship of countries✅relationships among countries
...
❌many of people ✅many people
❌Hard to them✅difficult for them