#feedback

Vocabulary 7
Task response 7
Grammatical range and accuracy 6.5
Coherence and cohesion 6.5




Extreme climate
Are likely to attack
Have not been accustomed
Exceeds 50'c
Has effect on
Will lead to dehydration
Is changed 😳😳😳
pluses and minuses 😳😳😳
Increase the capacity of bearing problems....sounds Farsi

In first paragraph, 2 main supports are not separated. For example by first of all and secondly.

#advice
Try to minimise your introduction and conclusion, preferably keep them to 40 words and write longer body paragraphs.